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Discuss the difference between fast food and traditional food, such as nutrition, and recipe?

Nowadays, a multitude of fast food is changing human’s eating habits. Comparing with traditional food, fast food has its special advantages, including lower price, convenience and fashion. However, there are also lots of negative side effects which provoke people to concern about, such as nutrition, recipe and well-liking problems. Personally, in my opinion, both fast food and traditional food have difference advantages and disadvantages.

Human relationship can not be established by fast food eating pattern. In modern society, the pace of human’s life becomes much faster, while the relationship of human’s becomes less friendly. Why? It is easy to find the answer. Obviously, the more fast food people have eaten, the less opportunity people have to communicate. Nevertheless, fast food also brings the children’s character to be disconsolate, because they have not got parental love. Can you imagine a child who has eaten humbugger and Coker Collar without parent’s emotional exchange every day? That’s cruel but really.

Further, even the short order is inviting and appetizing, but it is void of nutrition for human’s health. A statistics figure from an international nutritionist group recently, shows that serious of fitness problems will arouse if a person who has eaten hyper-calorie meal frequently. The evidence indicates that the excessive intake fatty and fried food probably broke balanced diet and cause a variety of deathful disease. Accordingly, from nutritionist point of view, conventional food will support affluent nutrition to body systemizes.

Lastly, traditional food can in stand of a historical culture, but fast food just play a popular role in modern society. Take Hun Ton, which is one kind of long history traditional food as an example, has its special way to recipe. Moreover, Hun Ton, make foreigners not only would be able to experience the unique flavor and fascinating culture, but also they would be able to acquire a better and much-needed understanding of Chinese people. If foreigners can learn more about the special culture from traditional food, they can spread that knowledge to their family and friends.

In summary, although fast food and traditional food have their difference characters, it is important to establish the correct balance between both.

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Some people think visitors to other countries should imitate local custom and behaviors. Some people disagree. They think the host country should welcome cultural difference. What do you think?

Modern society, in case that the work competitive and depression, more and more people choose tourist and visit other countries as their lifestyle to release the stress. However, some people convince that visitors should following the local custom where they have visited. Opponent reads that the aboriginal people should welcome the difference cultures. Personally, as I say, whether the difference cultural should be allowed or not, it depends on difference situations.

First and foremost, it is vital important that local customs and behaviors hold on to different regions. Human beings have a long history and the local cultural undergo transformation from generation to generation. So, some of the core value behavior are not easily to renew by the foreign visitors because the original character is priceless for the local civilizations. That’s why people want to travel the countries one by one. Thus, what the signification traveler has experienced is that the varsity conventional customs in all over the world.

Furthermore, even though unique heritage need unique protect, but to some extent, cross-cultural contact could be established by foreign visitors. Local civilizations must not persist in their traditional stand of social conduct and backward production technology. From history view, each human being’s social and technology revolutions are following the cultural exchange by the visitors. Countless examples can be advanced to support the argument. Take light, which is invocated by an American scientist as a case point. Visitor spread this invocation to from American to all over the world, finally, the world are not darkness as usual.

Lastly, of crucial importance, it is hardly to define to what extent people should hold their character custom and traditional habits. Whilst the roles within that nationalist’s behavior may be difference, they are nevertheless equal in importance to human beings. Overall, the special significant for human’s social advance among difference cultural hinge on what we available and how we applied.

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The private motor vehicle has greatly improved individual freedom of movement. Moreover, the automobile has become a status symbol. Yet the use of private motor vehicles has contributed to some of today’s most serious problems. How can the use of private motor vehicles be reduced?

No issue is more important now than one that the increasing private motor vehicle, which is commonly held by public. A huge array of problems arouse from the urban private automobiles recently. Private motor vehicle has been seen as wealth and authority symbol. But people are taking a fresh look at it. Personally, the developing of urban motor should be controlled and channel off by government.

First and foremost, air pollution is become worse and worse. As acknowledge knows, fresh air environment is indispensable to life. Although the automobile bring some conveniences to people in particular situations, but there also many side effects to the environment, such as air pollution caused exhaust gas. Then, moreover, one recently survey from Beijing, the capital of China, shows that nearly ten thousands people die each year from diseases linked to inhale the low quality air and this phenomenon will from bad to worse.

Furthermore, government must frame a rationalization blueprint for city planning. Because the globalization economic booming, numerous old common facilities could not bear the weight of changing. The government should pay more attention on the urban traffic jam-offer loan and feasible policy . Namely, the traffic jam will result in the exhaust gas increasing and damaging the environment. So, the more instruments develop, the less traffic jams arise.

Lastly, government and media organization should channel off the conception to common people. Actually, social consciousness can be gradual changed by education and drumbeating. To this method, more and more people must begin to realize the private motor vehicle’s drawback and public traffic facility’s dominance. Then, the private motor vehicle will not link to especial individuals but as traffic facility.

In sum, I strongly think that the most efficient and effective way to mitigate series of problems from increasing private automobile could via two ways. One is controlled by government agency. Another is enhance citizen’s social responsibility.





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